Hans Grudnar Intro

[BOS]

I would like to introduce everyone in the league to Hans Grudnar.  Hans was born in a quiet little town in the German mountains, where learned is love for soccer from his father.  Hans and his father played soccer anytime they had free time while Hans was a young man. This helped to grow is skills from a very young age. Hans continued to show his love for the game playing and many clubs gaining as much experience as he possibly could. Gaining some notoriety as quite a good young player.  He then applied to the SSL academy hoping to be able to join taking his game to the next level.  Hans is a work horse willing to put in the work to become the best soccer player that he can possibly be!  Any team in the academy will be extremely happy with the addition of Hans to their team.  Hans will show his great work ethic along with the skills he has already gained though his years of player to show that he will become one of the top players in any league.  Hans is here and ready to play, going to show this league what he is capable of!

[DivogoJota]

Welcome to the league! Very nice introduction to the league, though the article has some grammatical or spelling errors ("is" instead of "his") which impacts the flow of the article. A structure is in place, but it is a bit disjointed and inconsistent. A deeper development of the ideas and building on previous sentences would significantly improve future articles.

2/5